托福学术讨论写作 第一套官方样题解析和范文

在前几天，官方公布了新托福考试的模考样题和全新的考试界面。

?托福官方推出免费模考练习！帮助还未参加考试的同学了解新的考试页面和流程。 除此，所以模考练习都附有评分和解析。

趁着这个机会，老师也第一时间去练习了其中的第一套官方样题和评分。因为正好这套题，官方没有给写作范文，只是给了写作建议和思路。

题目是：

As I mentioned in class, governments make public policies to describe their responses to various problems that affect a community. Part of this process involves setting and defending priorities about which issues deserve the most attention and resources. For example, governments need to decide whether they should spend more money on education or on environmental protections. If you were a policy maker, which issue would you argue is more important-education or environmental protections? Why?

对于这个题目，官方的建议是：

1. 可以同意Andrew的观点和思路：教育比环境更重要，但是要给出a meaningful addition.

"If you agree with Andrew that education should be the bigger priority, you could add to his argument by pointing out the amount of research that universities conduct—not only on solving environmental problems, which Andrew alluded to, but also on treating diseases, creating useful technology, and developing sustainable agriculture. Therefore, education funding has a bigger overall impact on improving human lives than investment in environmental protections only. This would be a meaningful addition to the support Andrew provided for his opinion."

⭕️这是官方提供的一种扩展的思路,并不是唯一一种写法.

2. 也可以同意Kelly的观点：教育比环境更重要，但是给出不同的support.

"You might agree with Kelly that environmental protections should be the priority. You will need to add your own support for this viewpoint."

3. 当然你也可以认为,kelly说得有道理，但还是觉得教育更重要。-->这就是传统的让步转折观点。

"You may find you agree with a point Kelly made about the environment even though you think education is more important."

4. 或者你提出一个完全不同的观点。

"Or you might even find that your opinion about government priorities depends on certain factors—that education should be a priority in some circumstances, environmental protections in others."

所以，从中大家可以很明确地看出来，官方对大家观点的选择的自由度放得很宽。其次，对于什么是make a contriution to the discussion 也做了解释。只要是解释和支撑了自己的观点，没跑题，都可以，都是参与了讨论。

"There is no “correct” answer to the question. The important part of this task is to make sure that you state your opinion and provide reasonable, relevant support for it in a way that makes a meaningful contribution to the online discussion."

所以，老师就限时写了一篇:环境更重要的作文，得分是5分.

现在修改一些小的语法，调整了一下句子结构和连贯后的作文。

参加过老师写作团的同学应该觉得很眼熟，从中看到老师讲过结构和表达。

I am inclined to agree with Kelly’s viewpoint that governments should prioritize environmental protections over education. While education has shouldered the responsibility to cultivate our next generation, the importance pales in the comparison with the urgence of environmental protections. Nowadays the environment issues are too severe to wait for another generation to tackle. Consider Global Warming. Last year, a ferocious heat wave swept acrosee Europe. This unprecedented event resulted in multiple extreme heat warnings and, tragically, the loss of thousands of lives, particularly among vulnerable groups who lacked resources. A catastrophe would have been avoided if people had not beeing burning such large amounts of fossil fuels, which have significantly increased carbon dioxide levels, contributing to global temperature rise. Therefore, if governments still take the environmental protection secondary, turning a blind eye to these phenomena, there may not be many more generations left to educate. In conclusion, when faced with the alarmingly life-threatening environment degradation, it is more urgent and indispensable that governments prioritize environmental protection, providing a safe and sustainable world for education to thrive.(176字)